April 19
Dear Diary,
Today, my father has decided it’s time for me to get married. He
told me any man can have my hand. He doesn’t care who it is. I know my father
wished I was a son, but I don’t understand why he hates me so much. Since I was
a kid, he has been distant towards me. Oh well. Soon, because of him, I will marry
some strange man and never see him again.
April 23
So, it happened. A man came for my hand. He is the most atrocious
man I think I’ve ever seen. I cannot believe father would let a man like that
take me. He just wants me out of his hair. I went to the hen-wife to ask for
advice. She said, “Say you will not take him unless they give you a coat of
silver cloth.” And tomorrow, that’s just what I’ll do.
April 25
Dear Diary,
I told him what the hen-wife had said and he did it! He showed up the next day with the coat. Tomorrow I’m
going back and trying again. Hopefully this time, she gives advice that will put an end to this man's advances. I’ll let you know how it goes.
Love,
April 29
Ugh, it didn’t work! Again! This time, she told me, “Say you will
not take him unless they give you a coat of beaten gold.” And of course, he
returns the next day with said coat. I cannot win. I do not want to marry him! He’s
old, ugly and has a weird smell. Why can’t I marry for love? Father and Mother
married because they loved each other. Why can’t Father let me do the same?
Until next time..
Love,
May 3
I returned one more time to the hen-wife. Once again she told me
to tell the man, “Say you will not take him unless they give you a coat made of
the feathers of all the birds of the air.” This time when I repeated her
message, he sent a man with peas to cry out to the birds, “Each bird take a
pea, and put down a feather.” To which they obliged. He returned THAT NIGHT
with the coat. He is relentless. I went back to the hen-wife asking her what I
must do this time. She responded, “Say they must first make you a coat of
catskin.” I did so and now I must wait. Hopefully this request is too much for
him and he will give up. One can only hope though.
Love,
May 7
Dear Diary,
He returned with a coat of catskin…OF COURSE! I cannot marry this
man. So I have decided to leave. I won’t be a bother to Father and I won’t have
to marry that man. It’s a win win for everyone, except for the man, but I don’t
care. He can find someone else.
May 13
Dear Diary,
Sorry it has been so long. When I left Father’s, I put my catskin
coat on, grabbed the other coats and ran. Eventually I came upon a castle. I hid
my dresses outside and went in to ask for work. The only work they could give
me was scullion, which means I do all the dirty work in the kitchen, GROSS! It’s
better than being married to that gross man I suppose. Anyways, the cook hates
me. She is so cruel all the time. She has also given me the name Catskin,
because of my dress. At least I don’t have to tell anyone my real name.
May 24
Oh my, so much has happened since the last time I wrote. The most
important is that I met the love of my life! He’s so handsome and sweet. The
only problem is that he is the young lord of the house. I can never be with him. A
few days ago, he was returning home, so the lady of the house threw a grand
ball to honor him. I snuck out that night, bathed in a crystal waterfall and
put on my coat of silver. As soon as I walked in, nobody could take their eyes
off me. I received so many compliments that night. I accidentally bumped into the
young lord and we immediately fell in love. He asked me to dance and we did so
all night. It was magical. Sadly, it had to come to an end. I hope to see him
again.
May 29
I saw him again! Word around the house is that the lord fell in
love with the lady in silver and refuses to marry anyone else. They threw
another ball and of course I had to show up. I snuck out again, bathed in the
crystal waterfall (it makes my skin so soft), and this time I wore my coat of
beaten gold. Once again, all eyes were on me. It made me nervous. I thought
someone would recognize me as the scullery maid, yet nobody did. Again, we danced all night and it
was magical. Afterward, I had to rush back to the kitchen before the cook
realized I was gone. She would not be happy if she found out what I was doing.
June 6
Dear Diary,
So much has happened! They threw another ball. This time I wore my
coat of feathers. Everyone was in awe of my dress. I felt like a princess. My
love and I danced all night, yet again. Once the night came to an end, I had to
hurry back to the kitchen. Only this time, he followed me. He saw me change
into my catskin dress and immediately knew who I was. When he told me of his discovery, my heart
sank. I knew this was goodbye. How could he love me? A dirty scullery-maid. I
was wrong though. He told his mother that he wanted to marry me and fell ill
when she told him no. The lord told the doctor that he refused to take any
medicine unless it was from my hands. The lady of the castle had to approve or
her son would die. Now, we are set to be married at the end of the month! My
dreams have finally come true and I couldn’t be happier.
Author’s Note: For
this story, I wrote it as a diary from “Cindy.” In the original story, she is
known as Catskin. Since this is a version of Cinderella, I chose the name Cindy
to hint at the readers. Most of the story is the same, but from the perspective
of Catskin. The major part that I secluded from the story was the cruelty of
the cook towards her. The cook gives her the name Catskin because of the dress
she was wearing when she arrived. For each of the dances, Catskin mentions to
the cook that she would like to go. The cook berates her and then abuses her in
some way. For the first ball, the cook threw a basin of water in Catskin’s
face. For the second, she broke a ladle across her back, and for the third she broke a
skimmer across her head. After the balls, the lord would ask Catskin where she
lived and she told him at the sign of the Basin Water, at the sign of the
Broken Ladle and the sign of the Broken Simmer. He attempted to find those
signs and after failing, he decided to follow her. That is when he discovers
she is the scullery-maid.
After
they were married, they had a son. One day a beggar and her child came to the castle and the little prince gave the child
some money. The cook (which still didn't like Catskin) made a comment about beggars’ brats taking to one
another, which struck a nerve for Catskin. She asked her husband to find out
what happened to her father and they went to find him. Once they were reunited,
her father regretted how he treated Catskin, and they brought him back to the
castle to live with them.
Hi Melanie! If you didn't get a chance to finish this in time for Week 12, that's no problem; you can finish it, change the title to Week 13, and then do the Week 13 Declaration... which gives you one less thing to worry about next week too! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis was a really interesting story! The way it's written in a diary entry format was a nice touch, and it really gives me the feeling that a lot of things have happened in those two or so months. I didn't realize Cindy was an allusion to Cinderella, and looking back on it, I must be pretty dense to not catch that, haha. Anyways, your author's note does a great job at explaining what parts you changed from the original story!
ReplyDeleteHello Melanie,
ReplyDeleteRight away I appreciated the uncommon presentation style you chose to use for this week’s story post. Dividing the story into a series of diary entries provides a more in depth look into the mindset of a story’s main character and is a method I myself have used during the course of this semester. An additional touch I enjoyed was the signature from the main character/narrator Cindy. This is something I wish I had included during the course of my own journal based writing story. Choosing a diary entry style also allowed the perfect outlet for Cindy to vent about the situation she has found herself in that is not exactly ideal. I was unfamiliar with the story that was the basis of your narrative, but after reading your retelling it certainly has peaked my interest to return to the original story and read it. Overall a well written story and a joy to read.
I like how you have your story set up. I like the diary entries. I'm curious to see what happened to the mad that gave Cindy all the coats. I was expecting to find out that it was the lord of the house or the man was going to come back and curse Cindy. You did a great job of changing up the story and I am excited to read other ones you have!
ReplyDeleteSuch a sad story but at least there was a happy ending! I kind of feel bad for the old man that she didn't want to marry though! I mean it's completely understandable that she doesn't want to marry someone like that, but I feel bad that he went above and beyond to fulfill all her requests. Anyway, great retelling!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you retold this story. Using the dairy posts made it feel very personal. I enjoyed reading about Catskin's, or I suppose Cindy's, thoughts through all of this, since you don't get that in the original story. I really liked how you took this story and made it your own and made it still enjoyable. Really great job!
ReplyDeleteThe diary entry format is so cool, especially how you even incorporated the signature. I absolutely love Cinderella, so I love that it was tied to that. It's exciting that the past readings have been over fairy tales that we knew growing up. Well, spin offs I should say. Anyways, I really like how it was told through Cindy's perspective.
ReplyDeleteInteresting read, great job!
I like the format you choose for your story, it’s very unique and gives a personally feel to the tale. I wonder if his “dislike” for his daughter will be answered at the end of the story. At least, Cindy has some type of support system since her father has isolated her. I wonder what happened to her mother?
ReplyDeletePicking impossible gifts sounds like a good idea until it comes back to bite you in the butt.
A mother is mentioned, hmmm!
I wonder if the ugly lord is going to make an appearance and be the father of this lord. I think this is a clever retelling of Cinderella. The dresses are the ‘glass slippers’ and instead of one night it’s a couple nights which allows the two lovebirds to get to know each other. I wonder what would have ended differently if you included the abuse Cindy endured under the cook and how the lord of the house would have handled it if he knew she was being beaten. I think this would have given the story a different tone. You did great, I like your story.
Hey, Melanie! I really love this story that you have conjured up. It is so unique. I think one of my favorite aspects of this story is how you chose to tell it in the form of diary entries. I also like that you told it from Cindy's perspective. I wasn't sure what to expect at first with this story based on the title. I never would have guessed that it was a version of Cinderella. I like this version a lot better because there were multiple balls. It seems more realistic for two people to fall in love over several times of meeting each other rather than just once. I've never read the original story but your Author's Note did a great job of summarizing the original text. There isn't really anything that I would change about this story because it was so great! Overall, I really loved it! Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Melanie!
ReplyDeleteThis actually is one of my favorite layouts from a story I have read this whole semester. The diary entries really add a lot to the story! The perspective from Cindy is not only hysterical but very enticing as a reader and I love that you incorporated her thoughts and feelings into it. Make sure to read and re-read for typos!
Erin